Ich bin entzückt, hier hast Du die zarten Elemente, die sanfteren Schatten des Frühlings mit dem Klang von Wasserfarben in Einklang gebracht, und das Bild dazu...
Das "your" - gibt dem Satz eine persönliche Note, ist es Teil eines Gesprächs mit dem Maler/in?
Der Klang der Farbe, die Nuancen von Farben, die sinnliche Wahrnehmung, Auditives mit Visuellem vermischt, finde ich besonders gelungen. Gabriele
Ralf, you are leaving classic haiku-rules, more daring using synesthesia. You are on the way to lyric poetry. Good decision. I estimate this way. Once you will say "I did it my way". I like courageous poets.
Thank you very much everybody for your friendly comments. My son made this watercolour picture when he was two years old. I was fasinated, when he showed it to me. And I had Mr. Picassos word in my head that he tried to do everything to paint like a child. Yesterday I rediscouvered this painting among others. And the words found me.
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As a watercolour painter this really strikes a chord Ralf. Delightful haiga.
Beautiful composition, Ralf :)
wishes,
devika
very beautiful! not a word out of place. perhaps you could try adding the words to the picture?
Ich bin entzückt, hier hast Du die zarten Elemente, die sanfteren Schatten des Frühlings mit dem Klang von Wasserfarben in Einklang gebracht, und das Bild dazu...
Das "your" - gibt dem Satz eine persönliche Note, ist es Teil eines Gesprächs mit dem Maler/in?
Der Klang der Farbe, die Nuancen von Farben, die sinnliche Wahrnehmung, Auditives mit Visuellem vermischt, finde ich besonders gelungen.
Gabriele
....sigh...I caught my breath, oh how many ways do I love this..precious precious words and that watercolour, it's exquisite...who's the artist?
I think Lorraine has said everything - superb!
Ralf, you are leaving classic haiku-rules, more daring using synesthesia. You are on the way to lyric poetry. Good decision. I estimate this way. Once you will say "I did it my way". I like courageous poets.
Warm regards
Rudi
Thank you very much everybody for your friendly comments. My son made this watercolour picture when he was two years old. I was fasinated, when he showed it to me. And I had Mr. Picassos word in my head that he tried to do everything to paint like a child. Yesterday I rediscouvered this painting among others. And the words found me.
Best wishes
Ralf
Ralf ... this is, perhaps, my most favorite of yours.
actually ... 'one' of my most favorite
*smile*
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